Help me chose a summary statement
So I have written a couple of different summary statements. Which do you like better?
“Seeding the City” is a public art project that seeks to plant “seeds” of thought in the urban environment on challenges of climate change and potential for remediation. Social networking will determine the location for installation of individual green roof sample sites. Included with the installation will be educational and community building tools, and methods to trace the growth of the network. Online resources will include mapping of the project, tools for tracking local urban heat island effect and resources to recreate the project worldwide.
“Seeding the City” is an art project that utilizes social networking to site urban interventions in the form of green roof modules. It capitalizes on community building to introduce urban environmental issues and remediation tools. The modules and their accompanying flags and street level signage will track the growth of the network throughout the neighborhood. Online resources will include mapping of the project, tools for tracking local urban heat island effect and resources to recreate the project worldwide.
Let me know in the comments!
Jenn said:
I like the 2nd one better — I think it’s a little clearer. YAY!
Margo said:
I like the first 2 sentences of the 2nd one but the 1st one from “Included in the modules…”
You can’t expect a straughforward answer from me for an either or question!;)
Kelly said:
I second the second one.
Liz said:
DEFINITELY the first. Much more reader-friendly.
Liz said:
I do like THIS line from the second one, though. “It capitalizes on community building to introduce urban environmental issues and remediation tools.”